A life of misery
“Morning Mum,morning Dad,”mumbled Fred the thin,tiny hopeless boy,as he gulped down a rushed breakfast of cornflakes.
“Visiting Joel today,”informed Fred.
Before he could touch the door handle his mom called him
”Honey, now remember that we’re going out to the gym today and won’t be back till 5pm.”
Bye, thought Fred rushing Off.

“Hello”he called into the empty, yellow house  peering at his watch. It was 6pm. He stared at the door. Just then a knock on it startled him. Must be them, he thought. But it wasn’t. Instead it was a grim looking man holding a shiny object. The shattered remains of his father’s watch.

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  1. Unknown20 April 2018 at 16:45

    Wow Churchill Park writing group what an interesting start to a story. I love how you have used the prompts to aid yout description of setting and character. My favourite bit is the ending a real cliff hanger. It would be great to know where you think the story could go next. Well done, keep writing,
    Mrs Clare Team 100wc
    Nagoya, Japan

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  3. Anonymous29 April 2018 at 16:17

    I love the describing words you used.

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  4. Anonymous29 April 2018 at 16:20

    I love how you used the words, you added them in very well. You are a very imaginative writer.

    Elizabeth

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